Trip to Gould Lake

Ways to make Olivia's narrative even better: 
Shamus suggests that Olivia add in what type of birds they were.
Nicholas suggests that Olivia should write about how many times the bird landed on her hand.
Adam suggests she should tell us how cold it was.
Ryan suggests that she should talk about how long we hiked for.
Fintan suggests that Olivia tell the joke he told!
Max suggests a concluding sentence.
Olivia's responses:
The birds that I fed were chickadees. The chickadees landed on my hand one time. The temperature was -13celsius. We hiked for two hours. It was so tiring. Fintan said that the only bird I would get is a magpie because I was wearing a bright coat and snow pants. And that was our fun cold day at Gould Lake!